Yes I believe this is what she truly wants her readers to write. She explains "show don't tell" but she kind of preaches that the path to excellence writing is showing and telling. The art of description can lead a writer to many different routes in an essay. It does show true for essays in school because we are obviously not just writing in conversation with the teacher. No matter who reads the essay, whether they are in our class or not, they should be able to understand everything that we are talking about. A writer can get carried away and Patricia describes an example of a particular author who does this. Its great practice, I think is what she is suggesting.
I am looking at an emptey Ranier Beer can. It is a very simple design painted on the aluminum. The way it just sits there can make one recall a number of experiences seeing an empty beer can. One may be reminded of the good times they had while drinking it or they can be disgusted because the hangover is so bad that they wish they had never seen it. Its amazing how 12 oz. of a certain brand of unique beer can be so significant. In a pile of empty Busch Light cans, the one Ranier stands out. It's dominate white background with red writing and gold ribbon would suggest it is a classy beer. But in fact it is very cheap and in fact almost cheaper than Busch Light itself. I could go on and on about past experiences with Ranier, my favorite beer. The good and bad times are amplified by consumption of alcohol.
i think that my first thought is how could you possibly drink beer...i dont drink my self but it sounds nasty and i know that it smells nasty...
ReplyDeletemy second thought is that i agree with what you are saying on how she is only givin it as a sugestion, but me, myself, personally feel that that is something that a person or anyone should practice. showing someone something may be easier then just telling them i know that i am a learner my actually seeing things and touching and feeling them not by just hearing an explanation.
Nah, remember how she comments that writers do too much show? She says that writers throw too much precious space into describing objects instead of just telling the story. She says early that writing can seem too autobiographical sometimes.
ReplyDeleteI like that you described not just what the beer can looks like, but what it also can suggest. I think that you can think of better things to say than, "one would would think" but it is definitely in the right direction. Later on you do say "I' and you could have just said that for one in the first place.
You make a valid point, that we are not just creating a conversation within our writing, but creating a picture that can help illustrate our ideas. But maybe you could add that patricia wants us to show AND tell, because combined they do far more than what those two things could do separately. And i think you understood the aspect of show and tell since you put in your blog that the reader needs to know everything that we are talking about, and to do that you must tell the reader, and then show them to give complete understanding.
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